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Post by ::MakybeDiva428:: on Sept 28, 2009 20:53:42 GMT -5
Hola! If anyone would like some tips on roleplaying, post here. I myself am only a beginner, but I hope I can teach you some stuff  |
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Post by jamie12 on Sept 28, 2009 20:58:16 GMT -5
hi I need some help
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Post by ::MakybeDiva428:: on Sept 28, 2009 21:00:47 GMT -5
ok. So just do a fake post, anything you like. So a stallion discovering a land or soemthign, or a post you have already done
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Post by jamie12 on Sept 28, 2009 21:03:54 GMT -5
speaking to Silver Arrow
"I now know that considering that I have been here for a long time but I have no where else to go" she said as she stood up.
the filly then stretched and fell down as th filly has not had much food in the past week.
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Post by ::MakybeDiva428:: on Sept 28, 2009 21:19:23 GMT -5
Ok well I will do a mock post on what you could elaborate on, by what I am given "I know that now." The filly said as she heaved herself up, shaking her fluffy black mane to get rid of the Autumn leaves. She looked up at the stallion infront of her, her big eyes almost begging. " I have no where else to go" She said, her tone sober as she sniffed a little.
She stretched, her long gangly legs barley supporting the weak ebonite filly, her ribs showing as she had not had any sustainable food in the last week. Her knees buckled and she fell down, wincing at the huge effort of strength she had used. COMPARED TO "I now know that considering that I have been here for a long time but I have no where else to go" she said as she stood up. the filly then stretched and fell down as th filly has not had much food in the past week. Pointers in this post: - use the size down button( A with arrow pointing up and down in toolbar), it makes your posts more professional looking. - Colour the writing in, it can reflect the horses mood or just make it more interesting and bright - Do the blockquote ( Arrow pointing to right in toolbar) to make you paragraphs appear bigger - Elaborate more on her actions and surroundings, explain the story more. - Don't use chatspeak -talk about the fillies mood - simply explain the way she stands up, the way her tone is, explain everything more -paragraph after about 6 or so lines Try this on the same post |
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